15 Comments
Nov 5Liked by Sally Thomas, Joseph Bottum

I enjoyed this poem so. much. Yes - a feeling easy to identify with.

She died so young! What did she die of?

Expand full comment
author

Pneumonia, I think.

Expand full comment

It is immature and frankly quite moving. It captures a sadness that I don’t know you ever outgrow.

Expand full comment
Nov 5Liked by Sally Thomas

I grew up in a town like Pierre, in the coastal hills of Northern California, a town perhaps not unlike Pierre--a frontier town. i grew up there at least until I was 13, and when back in summers, during one of which--I was 21, I wrote many awful, awful poems. The poem below benefits, I think, from being free verse. I could no more have written a formal poem in meter and rhyme than I could have stood on my head or flow to the moon. Under the cloak of "free" verse, I was over many years able to develop as a formalist poet, just as under the cloak of others' compassion and acceptance of my foibles and deep flaws, I was able to grow as a person.

Orange Songs

1

The boy with the flute plays a pipe

And the song rises, a streak of silver smoke.

Another strums country blues, off-tune.

A third hums, mournful.

2

Round and fresh, from a far-off grove,

The fruit’s thrust into my hand.

I drive my thumb down its center;

The splitting of the moon, and bring cool-skinned,

Scented crescents to lips

Displaced in the darkened room.

Expand full comment
author

This is really lovely, both the poem and the reflection. I could say so much of the same --- about developing under the cloak of free verse, which is how I first started writing poems, and also grace given to my faults as I blundered my way into something like maturity.

Expand full comment
Nov 5Liked by Joseph Bottum, Sally Thomas

Joseph, Joseph. Tomorrow I will be 83. Today I am consumed with anxiety about an election which I believe that whoever wins will be a loss to our great nation and now I read today’s poem. Thanks much. 😎

Expand full comment
author

Oh, we're birthday twins. Happy birthday to you! (I turn 60, which is . . . older than I have ever yet been).

Expand full comment

Happy Birthday, Sally Thomas!

Expand full comment
author

Thank you, Zara!

Expand full comment
Nov 5Liked by Sally Thomas

Sally: Happy 🎂 Birthday. You ain’t seen nothing yet.

Expand full comment
author

Thanks. I shall hold on tight for whatever the wild ride turns out to be.

Expand full comment
Nov 5Liked by Sally Thomas, Joseph Bottum

An early happy birthday, and a joyous or comic poem for you as well.

On a different note, in elections we get the government we deserve as we voted them in. God help us!

Expand full comment
Nov 5Liked by Sally Thomas

Happy Birthday!

Expand full comment
Nov 5Liked by Sally Thomas, Joseph Bottum

I still see stuff like in hardware stores that I could use to turn into something for my dolls house. And I think I could use that and then I realize that I don’t even have a doll’s house anymore. I like the poem, but I don’t honestly think it’s tragic!

Expand full comment
Nov 6Liked by Joseph Bottum

Yeah "tragedy" is a bit over-dramatic, but it's a very effective piece of melancholia.

Expand full comment